CF_Fighter
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Come back OP
They got to him.
Come back OP
Every story needs a compelling lead character. I recommend using Edward Snowden. Maybe the government isn't after him just because of intelligence leaks. Maybe he knows something. Something about God.
Dear God.Two things to note from viewing the original Kickstarter.
1.) The OP doesn't know how to use a semicolon, but insists on using them anyway.
2.) There's a link to download the first ten pages of the script and no one here has mentioned it.
Also, someone should tag the OP with: "THE LIGHT FIELD is the force. The mind. That guides. Controls."
They got to him.
They got to him.
FADE IN:
EXT. UNIVERSE
The universe as seen through God's eyes;thousands of stars
shine in the blackness like moonlight on the night's ocean.
The stars energise. Surge. Pulse with throbbing white light.
The stars strobe with the light of a thousand cameras. We
shoot through the stars at the speed of light. Accelerate
through the electric rivers of the cosmos.
The universe slows down for a moment. In this moment we see
the stars in groups. Systems. Spheres of cosmic light chasing
each other like planets orbiting their sun.
The moment ends. The universe speeds up. The veil of God's
vision vanishes. We shoot through the universe once more.
Arrive at one particular star system. Ours.
God's a robot isn't he/she?EXT. POLICE STREET - LIGHT VISION [ON]
The street as seen through God’s eyes; Lathan sprints. The
Church Choir sings. The street becomes the light field; a
holographic tunnel of thousands of dots of photonic lights
suspended in blackness. Lathan shimmers. Sparkles. Becomes a
hologram; brighter dots of light collected in the three
dimensional shape of his human frame that sprints down the
cosmic street like a futuristic angel.
[OP's name] is an energetic. Driven. Determined screenwriter with a Master's degree in Feature Film Screenwriting from the Royal Holloway University of London.
the screenplay preview is pretty amazing imo
This is the craziest thing I've ever seen.
The film Priest (2011) was a Pentagon-powered effort after they had proven God exists because they thought that if they didn't start creating films that were pro-Christian then something negative might happen to humanity. They felt that they needed to "worship" this mysterious spirit of the universe or humanity might not exist for much longer.
Priest, a western-fused post-apocalyptic thriller, is set in an alternate world -- one ravaged by centuries of war between man and vampires.
The story revolves around a legendary Warrior Priest (Paul Bettany) from the last Vampire War who now lives in obscurity among the other downtrodden human inhabitants in walled-in dystopian cities ruled by the Church.
When his niece (Lily Collins) is abducted by a murderous pack of vampires, Priest breaks his sacred vows to venture out on an obsessive quest to find her before they turn her into one of them.
Will there be any male frontal nudity in this?
That's the $100 pledge
Hey he didn't say full frontal.I think that just results in the shirt being taken off.
Honestly? It sounds like it's both "too much" as well as not compelling enough. You need to appeal to more people, and the themes you're going for only appeal to a very small amount. Try not to get too cliche'd either.
If you want this to work, you need to ask "what do a lot of people want to watch".
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Long story short back in March of 2008 I befriended a member of the British intelligence services (MI6). She was an intelligence officer working for them. We became quite close over a couple of months and she told me information that if I ever wrote about would put Wikileaks to shame. Imagine you're The Pentagon. Imagine you've existed for the better part of a century. Imagine you're an organisation consisting of twenty thousand people and you're sole purpose is to protect America.
Now if you're The Pentagon and you discover or come across a profound set of information that could potentially change the world what would you do? Would you immediately call CNN and ask them to publicise it or would you think that this information, which no other country on the planet knows, could potentially give your nation an edge in the global sphere and therefore come to the conclusion that you should keep this knowledge a secret to advance your nation's position on the world stage?
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ULTRA GAMES PRESENTS - SUPER HUMAN - Set in the distant future our superhero Lathan Devers (tm) wakes in a nocturnal cityscape overrun by the neon red lights and speeding blur of ballet-spinning robots on the eve of the singularity. Lathan must use his future human evolutionary powers to fight through the robotic waves to reach his little sister Ria Devers at humanity's last stand; the Eden Barrier; before time runs out.
MI6 told me he was chilling with Edward Snowden. They tried getting a hold of him but God shielded him.:/ I love how everyone's mocking the OP while the poor bastard is probably in some Pentagon subbasement being waterboarded.
:/ I love how everyone's mocking the OP while the poor bastard is probably in some Pentagon subbasement being waterboarded.
if this is a troll, seriously well done. If not Its the most enetertaining descent into craziness i've ever read.
Okay well these comments specifically are a rather sobering prognosis. Perhaps I "tried too hard". In terms of explaining I could, but I highly doubt whether you would believe me. I'm no-one man. I have no credibility. I could write pages upon pages here explaining things and still you would have a severe amount of doubt in your mind because, who is this person again?
Long story short back in March of 2008 I befriended a member of the British intelligence services (MI6). She was an intelligence officer working for them. We became quite close over a couple of months and she told me information that if I ever wrote about would put Wikileaks to shame. Imagine you're The Pentagon. Imagine you've existed for the better part of a century. Imagine you're an organisation consisting of twenty thousand people and you're sole purpose is to protect America.
Now if you're The Pentagon and you discover or come across a profound set of information that could potentially change the world what would you do? Would you immediately call CNN and ask them to publicise it or would you think that this information, which no other country on the planet knows, could potentially give your nation an edge in the global sphere and therefore come to the conclusion that you should keep this knowledge a secret to advance your nation's position on the world stage?
From what this woman told me, The Pentagon proved God exists on December 16, 2009 at precisely 4:00am. They had been working towards this for decades. They wanted to prove whether their theorised "spirit of the universe" actually existed and they pulled it off. They discovered that "God" or rather the spirit and essence that exists beyond the veil of this universe was an invisible photonic energy field that generated the universe and now controls the planets and the stars.
You honestly wouldn't believe some of the plans The Pentagon developed and executed over the last twenty years. All I'll say is that America's general filmography reflects the knowledge that The Pentagon generated. Here's a good example. The film Priest (2011) was a Pentagon-powered effort after they had proven God exists because they thought that if they didn't start creating films that were pro-Christian then something negative might happen to humanity. They felt that they needed to "worship" this mysterious spirit of the universe or humanity might not exist for much longer.
You mentioned that the Superhuman Kickstarter sounds like "the ravings of a crazy person". I would interpret that as that I tried way too hard which I fully admit to. Imagine if you knew things that no-one else knew. Imagine if you were never really able to safely profess said things to anyone for the risk of them not believing you, and for the risk of The Pentagon placing a target on your back. Now imagine if you desperately wanted funds and interest in your work to eventually change the world.
Wouldn't you try too hard to make that happen? As I said, I'm no-one. At least at the moment. I could post threads here on NeoGAF with the knowledge that I have but I highly doubt whether anyone would believe me purely based on the fact that I have zero credibility. This is the profound frustration of being nameless. I hope one day I'll have the ability to deploy my knowledge and have people believe me. This Kickstarter was an attempt to inject energy in to that.
If you truly want me to explain how I know they proved God exists I will elaborate. My question however would be, what's the point? You won't believe me. I regretted including that in the Kickstarter about halfway through the project. I incorrectly calculated that this information alone would generate interest in the Kickstarter and it backfired. In hindsight I would have been better off not including it. And this is the precise reason I'm hesitating upon sharing the information now. Now matter what I write, would you believe me? Answer honestly.
Thank you to everyone who has replied so far. It has provided some sobering and honest insight to which I have have not access to before. I appreciate it.
if this is a troll, seriously well done. If not Its the most enetertaining descent into craziness i've ever read.
Forget about Superhuman. From your pitch it doesn't sound appealing in the slightest, it's just a combination of different cliches and tropes. No one on Kickstarter will fund the screenplay of yet another generic superhero movie, there's just too much of it on the market already.
Your crazy pentagon story however? That one is amazing. Write a batshit insane novel about that, it'll certainly make for an entertaining ride.