Haha, the (admittedly subtle) joke is that December 13, 2013 is the Friday closest to (Monday) December 16th, 2013. Which is the date a movie studio would actually release the film for marketing purposes.
This is my guess too. I hope it's good.
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Superhuman Kickstarter: Returning to Kickstarter a Second Time Round
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Haha, the (admittedly subtle) joke is that December 13, 2013 is the Friday closest to (Monday) December 16th, 2013. Which is the date a movie studio would actually release the film for marketing purposes.
This is my guess too. I hope it's good.
RomanticHeroX
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The existence of God was proven at 4 am? That's useless information, you don't even mention what time zone that is. Until you can tell me when God was discovered in .beats, a flawless and logical system that I believe God would use, I can't take you seriously.
Pentagon is on the East coast, you can figure out the time zone on your own.
RomanticHeroX
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Do you really want there to be ambiguity for something this important? All I'm saying is until he can clarify and give me .beats I can't consider the OP is credible.
TheKaeptain
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The Priest connection is the best part about his theory.
It is the journey we must take.
Damn it! You just gave the Pentagon the opportunity they needed to wipe OP from the face of the earth without arousing suspicion!
Mr. Poolman
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OP is Don Matrick. Satan is Steve Ballmer. OH GOD NO!!!!!
Vulcano's assistant
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Here's hoping this isn't this poster's last comment.
SquiddyCracker
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So I started a Kickstarter for my science fiction-action screenplay "Superhuman" about five months ago. Superhuman is a screenplay I have been working on for several years. I started the Kickstarter in the hopes of raising funds and generating interest in Superhuman as a project. The Kickstarter was a catastrophic failure. I received a record-low of three backers over the course of the month the Kickstarter was live.
So what's the point of this thread? I'm thinking of returning to Kickstarter and launching the Kickstarter again. I'm thinking of giving this another shot. I want to isolate and determine the precise reasons as to why the Kickstarter failed and then use this knowledge in an attempt to make the second attempt a resounding success. I have posted this thread here since Kickstarter has been quite popular on NeoGAF and I was hoping the members here may have some insight and advice on how to succeed with Kickstarter a second-time round.
To be clear this is not a thread asking for pledges. The Kickstarter that I'm talking about ended months and months ago. This is a thread asking for advice.
Here's the link to the Kickstarter if you're interested in reading about it.
Here's the first section of the pitch:
Again if you'd like to read more then please visit the now defunct Kickstarter page.
So why did the Kickstarter fail? And why did it fail to stupendously? I have had a lot of time to think about it and I have isolated several core areas that I will discuss here:
No video. This is probably the most important aspect that I overlooked. I was hoping that my writing talent alone could convey the power of the idea and screenplay of Superhuman and did not generate nor create a video for the pitch. This was actually a key factor that was previously criticised by NeoGAF members. Where's your video? In my defense my previous computer did not have a Webcam and I lacked the funds to get one. My Father recently bought me a new computer which does have a Webcam so if I were to launch the Kickstarter again the new pitch would absolutely have a video.
No concept art. In an unfortunate turn of events my concept artist who had previously generated some stunning artwork for Superhuman decided to hold said artwork hostage on the eve of the Kickstarter launch. He basically demanded that I pay him more money for his work. I had changed computers so I had lost the files he had previously sent me. This meant the Kickstarter went live without a single piece of artwork to convey the power and imagery of the screenplay. Even the main image for the Kickstarter was a haphazardly generated image I created using the "Bladerunner" font because I was desperate to have something, anything visual there. I'm almost certain this hurt the Kickstarter the most.
No press coverage. Around the halfway point of the Kickstarter after around two weeks had passed I realised that the Kickstarter was failing so I very rapidly started sending out a barrage of emails to anyone and everyone to whom I thought could help. This was basically hours and hours of sending pitch emails to film blogs and film websites begging them for coverage. A couple of kind souls complied and were kind-hearted enough to help me but ultimately the coverage fell short and was vastly insufficient. I sent out over a hundred and fifty emails and only two film blogs posted stories about Superhuman. If I were to hit this again I would try and get stories out significantly faster and ahead of time. Prior to the second Kickstarter even launching.
These are the three key areas that I think matter the most. It was a set of unfortunate circumstances that seemed to cascade in to the Kickstarter ultimately failing. It was so disheartening to see other Kickstarters launched around the same time becoming overnight successes when my own personal Kickstarter based on a labour of love I have worked on for several years failing to get any backers at all. I'm hoping that if I can somehow learn from the experience and execute and infuse that knowledge in to a second Kickstarter then Superhuman may, may just have a second chance.
So what is the purpose of this thread? NeoGAF in general is versed in Kickstarter. You guys watched as a remote and obscure platform suddenly hit the mainstream after Double Fine hit Kickstarter for their Double Fine Adventure game and many of you have backed many Kickstarters in the past. The purpose of this thread is to seek and gather advice, insight and potentially people who may want to help to ensure that attempting a re-launch of the Kickstarter for Superhuman succeeds a second time round.
Do you have any advice? Is it even a good idea to give Superhuman another shot on Kickstarter? Your feedback whether positive or negative would be deeply appreciated. I'm open to PMs from anyone who would like to help beyond replies to this thread.
Ultimately, should I give this another shot?
I'm loving it!
Hook me up as a script writer if you're in need of one.
Demoncarnotaur
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Um.
Wait what.
:lol
Ok, but seriously, I want to read this Pentagod doc.
Wait what.
:lol
Ok, but seriously, I want to read this Pentagod doc.
beat
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No. No no no no no.
They matter, but the key missing things are NO PRODUCT and NO POINT.
No product: you say this is to produce visualization works to help sell the script to a major studio. Well says Johnny Kickstarter, what happens at the end of this? I put money in and the best case result is you can take this script you already made and pair up some concept art and maybe even a fake trailer for it to sell it, at which point it might become a movie or it might be stuck in development hell. Why don't I just like my money on fire? (BTW, minor thing, but a major studio might not be happy that you've presold DVDs of the movie for £15-tier backers, making it even less likely that they'll buy the movie...)
No point: Read what Cyan said on the first page. I'll quote it again here:
You wrote the script already. You know how spec movies get made? A really good script gets into agents' hands and then into studios' hands and then they buy it and make the movie.
In extremely hard-to-visualize cases - say, like the Matrix - director-writers like the Wachowski siblings will (1) establish their reps with low-effect indie films first, and (2) hire artists themselves out of their own pockets to create that concept art and storyboards.
And seriously, "development of pitches"???? Who needs funding for that? Get a day job. A pitch is you selling the film to a studio by talking. You should be able to get good at talking without spending any money.
Look, enter it in a screenwriting contest or something. Maybe you can get some useful feedback or even win and pick up some notoriety that way.
script feedback:
- you're using sluglines as camera directions. Don't do that much direction in the screenplay. If the scene is some particular location that's all the slugline you need until the scene changes.
- to repeat what beseda said: your use of semicolons is wrong and will annoy at least some people.
- "The street as seen through Gods eyes;" - What does that mean? Birds eye view? False color? Slow motion? Don't give camera directions unless it's absolutely key and if you've got to do it, don't be vague about what you mean. Just be concrete.
- "The Robots fake the human voice again. ROBOT VOICE" - everything about this is confusing. Up the page, it should just be "Policeman 1 [offscreen", etc and then just reveal one of the robots is Policeman 1, maybe with direction that it's a normal voice. The way you've written this is confusing for several reasons as it obscures who actually plays what, whether the 'robot voice' is speaking with a human-sounding voice or not, ... it's a mess.
... BTW, has anyone pointed out to you that real MI6 agents don't usually spill classified secrets to new-ish friends in a pub?
Oh shit, this had my laughing for a good 2 mins, it made my eyes water.
beat
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Or baptized!
Broder Salsa
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*Baptized with freedom.
faceless007
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Hey, if The Da Vinci Code can actually get published and made into a movie, I don't see any reason this can't.
It'd probably be better.
It'd probably be better.
MrCunningham
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Man what a missed opportunity with the release date. It should be pushed to 5. 5. 2015 for total pentawesomeness.
So I've a friend who works in the Pentagon in intelligence....I just sent these ground-breaking revelations to him.
I doubt he'll be able to reply, but just know that those on the inside are now officially aware of it. If the Kickstarter is suddenly taken down and ThreeSixty and all traces of his existence are disappeared, then we'll know he was onto something.
I doubt he'll be able to reply, but just know that those on the inside are now officially aware of it. If the Kickstarter is suddenly taken down and ThreeSixty and all traces of his existence are disappeared, then we'll know he was onto something.
CF_Fighter
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"There are more sides to this story than you originally thought!"
GraveRobberX
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Came for the crazy, stayed for the BatShit!
MrCunningham
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Brilliant!
Tim the Wiz
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I would pay good money to watch an Archer spin-off based on PentaGod.
Frank the Great
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I wonder if all the uses of the word "Pentagon" have flagged this thread for review by the authorities. I like to imagine some terrorist analysts laughing their asses off reading this shit.
AngmarsKing701
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Is it possible that Voyager finding a bizarre area of space just beyond the solar system could be "the veil of PentaGod"?
Or is preparing a swat team to take out OP. He knows too much!
VGChampion
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This thread keeps getting better. I missed running into you.
I think the key is Priest 3D, honestly. It's what we're all skimming over.
If you take the first letter of each of the director Scott Stewart's film projects, you get WLPD. Windsor Locks is a town in Connecticut. In 2004, a Pentagon defense contractor called Hamilton Sundstrand was accused of overcharging the government for "helicopter parts". Now clearly these weren't helicopter parts, they were tools used to access the photonic energy field. The company has since been swallowed up by a merger, and the trail runs cold there. But if you view the source html on the new company's page:
Holy shit
edit: it's been removed! it was right there minutes ago
If you take the first letter of each of the director Scott Stewart's film projects, you get WLPD. Windsor Locks is a town in Connecticut. In 2004, a Pentagon defense contractor called Hamilton Sundstrand was accused of overcharging the government for "helicopter parts". Now clearly these weren't helicopter parts, they were tools used to access the photonic energy field. The company has since been swallowed up by a merger, and the trail runs cold there. But if you view the source html on the new company's page:
Code:
<!-- DEC1620094AM AURORA FOUND AND IDENTIFIED. -->edit: it's been removed! it was right there minutes ago
ok, this absolutely killed me... well done, good sir, well done indeed...
Wait you're... you're serious?
He's in purgatory
There's no way
hehe
Broder Salsa
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It's ballet-spinning robots. How much clearer do you need this?
bonesmccoy
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Oh, come on. How do you not know?
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